So... I am turning in, once again, less than a stellar DC. I worked on my Technical aspects, but did not get to the Logistical pages. I will do my best to get it in sometime between now and DC 4.
By now I'm sure that only 2 or 3 of you will even be reviewing it, so I suppose it doesn't much matter.
I'm going to just break things down as I read them in different parts.
Script -
I like the changes that you made to your script a lot. I really think that you have finally found something that you can do which is both feasible as well as interesting. I'm glad to see that you have been able to create the world that you want with the same type of action that you wanted, while also reigning it in and keeping it concise. I think the prologue is the way to go, especially with how attached to a feature that you have been.
I love the actions that you have placed in your script. For the most part they are something that can be accomplished and I think that the story does a great job of transitioning from one world to the next in a seamless manner that will leave the audience wondering what happened. I think that you have placed an interesting idea out there with the super-natural/reality world that seemed to be intertwined. The lack of dialogue and pure action also really help your story. I think that a lot is communicated through the visuals and we get enough out of the characters with the little bit of dialogue and visuals that you can allow us to understand the characters somewhat. While I could sit here and ask for more back story, I think you have given us enough clue to satisfy everything with the flashback at the end and the opening. It will accomplish what you wanted of leaving the audience wanting more, while allowing you to keep moving forward in a real sense with the product you have.
Creative Journal -
Much of it seemed the same. The additions that you made in the latter portions of the journal are good. I think you have a good grasp of what you are going to need to do come production. I think that shooting around a 4-5.6 is a great place to be for your film. I think it lends to the over all idea of what you are going to want to convey with a bit of shallow depth of field while allowing us to still see into the world a little bit. I would argue that you don't want to limit yourself as far as lens selection goes because there are some things that I would like to do that can require a wider lens to allow for some play with both focus as well as framing. I think that sound will be important like always and I am glad that you are thinking about that.
Your editing style clearly will lend itself to your production and I think that you will be in a good place once you get to that point because it is clearly your strong suit.
Logistical - Well that was a quick read.
Technical - I would like to talk with you about the lens comment. I would gladly argue the other direction and that it all matters but we can talk about that. I think that we can also look at some other ways of going about some of the shots that can pair with the Go Pro.
I am glad you are taking the safety portion seriously. Especially with your film, you are going to need to make sure that you have all of those T's crossed and the I(i)'s dotted. Make sure that the cast is safe in all of the situations and that everything is properly secured.
I think that you've got a great product on your hand and I love the idea of a pure action movie as you know. I think that if you keep moving forward with this you have something that will be visually stimulating on your hands. Plus there is a helicopter and who can be upset with a helicopter... ACTION and more ACTION... I rest my case
Good Morning, Birds!
ReplyDeleteSo... I am turning in, once again, less than a stellar DC. I worked on my Technical aspects, but did not get to the Logistical pages. I will do my best to get it in sometime between now and DC 4.
By now I'm sure that only 2 or 3 of you will even be reviewing it, so I suppose it doesn't much matter.
Anyways.... Enjoy.
Jason,
ReplyDeleteI'm going to just break things down as I read them in different parts.
Script -
I like the changes that you made to your script a lot. I really think that you have finally found something that you can do which is both feasible as well as interesting. I'm glad to see that you have been able to create the world that you want with the same type of action that you wanted, while also reigning it in and keeping it concise. I think the prologue is the way to go, especially with how attached to a feature that you have been.
I love the actions that you have placed in your script. For the most part they are something that can be accomplished and I think that the story does a great job of transitioning from one world to the next in a seamless manner that will leave the audience wondering what happened. I think that you have placed an interesting idea out there with the super-natural/reality world that seemed to be intertwined. The lack of dialogue and pure action also really help your story. I think that a lot is communicated through the visuals and we get enough out of the characters with the little bit of dialogue and visuals that you can allow us to understand the characters somewhat. While I could sit here and ask for more back story, I think you have given us enough clue to satisfy everything with the flashback at the end and the opening. It will accomplish what you wanted of leaving the audience wanting more, while allowing you to keep moving forward in a real sense with the product you have.
Creative Journal -
Much of it seemed the same. The additions that you made in the latter portions of the journal are good. I think you have a good grasp of what you are going to need to do come production. I think that shooting around a 4-5.6 is a great place to be for your film. I think it lends to the over all idea of what you are going to want to convey with a bit of shallow depth of field while allowing us to still see into the world a little bit. I would argue that you don't want to limit yourself as far as lens selection goes because there are some things that I would like to do that can require a wider lens to allow for some play with both focus as well as framing. I think that sound will be important like always and I am glad that you are thinking about that.
Your editing style clearly will lend itself to your production and I think that you will be in a good place once you get to that point because it is clearly your strong suit.
Logistical - Well that was a quick read.
Technical - I would like to talk with you about the lens comment. I would gladly argue the other direction and that it all matters but we can talk about that. I think that we can also look at some other ways of going about some of the shots that can pair with the Go Pro.
I am glad you are taking the safety portion seriously. Especially with your film, you are going to need to make sure that you have all of those T's crossed and the I(i)'s dotted. Make sure that the cast is safe in all of the situations and that everything is properly secured.
I think that you've got a great product on your hand and I love the idea of a pure action movie as you know. I think that if you keep moving forward with this you have something that will be visually stimulating on your hands. Plus there is a helicopter and who can be upset with a helicopter... ACTION and more ACTION... I rest my case